Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!

TITLE: The title is simple yet inviting, who doesn't love a tale about a ghost town, either literal or figurative.

THEME: The theme is a real ghost town and its undead inhabitants.

TONE: You have set the tone well with your figurative language, such as decaying, horrid and vile. Well done setting the scene.

PACE: The pace is not too fast or slow but perfect for reading aloud.

FLOW: I found your flow a bit flawed. In a Rondeau poem the lines should be a bit more consistent in their meter. If you go back and read your poem aloud you will see that the longer lines tend to be cumbersome. I bit of editing will take this poem up to a 5-star. I love the premise.

RHYTHM/METER: see above

RHYME: You are spot on with your rhyme scheme and you use wonderful vocabulary in your piece.

FORM: With the exception of the length of some of the lines you were spot on with the form. Good Job!

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE: You used wonderful imagery and descriptions in your poem! Excellent job! Your also used alliteration and internal rhyme, great use of poetic devices.

SPELLING/GRAMMAR: I noted no issues with spelling or grammar. It used to be convention to capitalize the first word in each line of a poem but now poets tend to use common grammar rules to capitalize.

TECHNICAL: In the 13th line I would change 'do they vaunt' to "they do vaunt".


EXCELLENT WRITING EXAMPLES: These lines are simply wonderful...

They lack substance, flesh, blood and bone
On their substance light is never shone
Their lifeless bodies are thin and gaunt


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