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Hi! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

I found your item through the random read and review option. The title of your poem really caught my attention and made me read your poem. The brief description gave the reader the idea as to what the poem is about. Although I am a daughter, teen too, I could feel the emotions you felt when you saw your daughter all dressed up, looking like a woman and no longer the little girl she used to be. It made me feel happy and I could sense the emotions or pride in the poem, especially the second last stanza, the pride of a mother seeing her child all grown up although with that, there's sadness too that you won't be able to take care of them anymore.

The last two lines were very touching and realistic because time passes very quickly, without stopping for anyone and I loved how you expressed the time passing so quickly with the vocabulary you did. Excellent way to present your views! Unique and beautiful, loved it!

The flow of your poem was good, there was no interruption. The vocabulary you used was strong, conveyed the emotions perfectly to the reader. My favourite stanza was the second last because I loved the way you mentioned that she no longer needed to raise her head in order to meet your eyes. Perfect!

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING YOUR WORK!

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