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Hi! I am Aqua and *BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR* The following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

I found your work through the Read a Newbie tool and decided to give it a read because of the title of your story. I wondered if the day went actually good or maybe the phrase 'A Good Day' was used sarcastically. I am always fascinated by reading flash fictions because I cannot write them, it's really difficult for me to write a story within hundred words or in such a small word count.

The beginning of your story was good, it made the reader curious as to the day you have described seems normal, so what would make this day good? As I read on and read the scene with the boss, I had a feeling that it is going a bad day, what would make it a good one but the ending was quite good and it summed up everything perfectly as to why the day was good. Just one suggestion:

==>“If anything it is mediocre, and mediocrity should not be encouraged.”
Awkward sentence structure, especially the second part of the sentence, it doesn't go with the entire sentence.

I liked the realistic factor in your story and the decision of the narrator, personally, I would have done the same. The boss himself says that everyone is impressed with the work of the narrator then what is the need to threaten the narrator to fire him? It would be his loss and good thing you left. No one should work with an ungrateful and unethical boss.

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING YOUR WORK!

Write On! *Writing*
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