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I try to forget you  [E]
A love poem those who lost for good
by Wasi
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Wasi! I am Aqua and *BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR* The following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

I found your poem on the Read a Newbie page and I wanted to have a look at what you have written. The title of your poem really captured my attention because it gave off vibes of emotions which included sadness, tragedy, and heartbreak. The theme was good and the title matched perfectly with the theme and the content of the poem. Good!

The flow of your poem was good, you had some very strong, raw emotions here. The vocabulary used was simple but strong enough to convey your emotions, thoughts and feelings to the reader. The poem was very sad and I personally think that the more you try to forget something, the more frequently, it finds its way to your mind and make you remember it every second, every agonizing minute. My favourite stanza was the last stanza because I agreed with it and it sums the poem perfectly!

I am guessing that English is your second language because I found some typos in your poem that can be fixed. Don't worry, English is my second language as well and we all start at some point and then improve from there by continuing writing. If you want some help with that, let me know and I will go into detail and discuss the poem with you. *Smile*

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING YOUR WORK!

Write On! *Writing*
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