*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4142331
Review #4142331
Viewing a review of:
 Sweet Tooth  [18+]
Delton Reeves has been buying chocolates from Micah Fischer for months. But for whom?
by beetle
Review of Sweet Tooth  
Review by A Non-Existent User
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Hi beetle ,

I'm reviewing as a judge of "Invalid Item" . Thank you so much for submitting your story.

I enjoyed this piece very much about two people whose attraction towards each other is mutual.

Dialogue kept the story flowing. Together with this, you also showed their reactions. Those small gestures such as grins and blinking of eyes make the characters say a lot to each other as well as to the readers, and you wrote those parts nicely.

The only part I felt you could improve a bit on was when Reeves was leaving the shop after Micah turned him down. It took long for Micah to think, and even after that, Reeves was still walking away. Maybe the shop was very big?

The characters appealed to me. Micah was quirky and Delton was confident. I liked them.

The ending too was a happy one. It kept me wanting to know more of what would happen during their date.

Great story. Write on!
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
   *NoteR* You have not yet responded to this review. Ignore
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4142331