Greetings, This is my response to your review request, I hope you find my input useful ^^


First Thoughts:

As I began reading the piece I found myself intrigued with the prospect of your disaster scenario. I'm a technician by trade, and I get the feeling you are to some extent, if you aren't you're at least a power user. As a result, I appreciated the references to real world examples like stuxnet and the Iranian uranium enrichment facilities as opposed to just saying a virus infected the world in one day or something. Over all, this premise as a plot device has a lot of potential.


After Reading:

Once I completed reading the piece I found your portrayal of a sort of 'doomsday' scenario where all of earth's programmable logic-based technology is rendered useless to be pretty believable. One con I noticed was the scene wherein Charlie and his family go to Wilson's gun range and begin to strategize their immediate survival. It seemed like they had all the bases covered, had a sustainable amount of resources for the foreseeable future, and a means of power and communication. Then, the moment they see gangsters on the horizon they start packing up and running when they have tons of fire power. In your own words, they could fight a small army with the ammo they could fit onto the truck. What really sealed this for me though was when the boys come back to warn the rest of the group about the impending threat, when in the same breath mentioning they took out two of their scouts seemingly without the slightest injury. I'd recommend adding in a few minor bruises, cuts and grazes to they boys when they come back to exemplify the danger this gang actually poses. I feel this would make the premise of abandoning the place and running for the hills a lot more justifiable. Remember, your characters are imaginary, but they are still mortal.

All in all, not a bad piece, there were several grammatical errors along the way, a bit too many to list by line and character count, but a good bit of proofreading on your part should clear these up.
I found your portrayal of a technopocolypse doomsday scenario believable on the whole and fun to read. I look forward to the final result.

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