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I Cried For You  [E]
3rd Place in the Shadows and Light Poetry Contest ~ Round 25
by Vanishing Vapor
Review of I Cried For You  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Vanishing Vapor ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

A very emotional and moving piece indeed. I found your item on the main Hub page in the recently awarded items and I wanted to have a look at the poem that won third place at such an amazing contest so here I am!

The title of your poem is very depressing and gives the reader the exact idea as to what the poem is about. In the first line, your use of the word 'behind' was clever and intriguing. Someone dear, very close to you has left you behind. The word 'behind' can be taken in many contexts, it could be dying and leaving you behind or someone leaving you behind either temporarily or permanently in the literal sense. In both contexts, the meaning of the word 'behind' is same. You create a sense of curiosity in the mind of the reader as to in which way it is used.

When I read the first line, I expected simplicity in the poem, instead, I found very complex structure and developed vocabulary over the next lines till the end of the poem which was a surprise for me, a good one, because I enjoyed it. You make the reader explore so many different ideas and emotions of being left behind that are very touching and heart-breaking at the same time. The poem made me feel sad and hopeless at the end.

The vocabulary you used in your poem was excellent, you used an advanced level of vocabulary that delivered the emotions you wanted to deliver to the reader perfectly. The flow of your poem was good, there was no interruption. It flew well on reading it out loud. As the poem progresses, you intensify the emotions and express more raw emotions in the poem. Of all the lines, my favourite lines were the following, I absolutely loved them and I Was really touched by them.

Yesterday no longer matters
There's no tomorrow today
The universe has collapsed
I'm consumed inside the black hole

Excellent! Loved it!

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR SHARING YOUR WORK!

Write On! *Writing*

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