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Review of Entwined  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Fi once again! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

I am a huge fan of dark genre and I read most of the items in this genre. When I read that it was dark and written for "Invalid Item" , I couldn't help but come over and read it! I had seen this prompt at Darleen's contest and I had intended to write for it but I never found the time or the muse. *Rolleyes* One of the most interesting sub-genres in dark genre is the dark romance which never fails to intrigue me.

The title of your poem is perfect because that is one word that would perfectly describe the image prompt and the poem suits perfectly with it. The first line of the poem is interesting as you capture the reader's attention right then and there. The third line of the first stanza was dark, beautifully written because it presented two ways or growing. The use of the word 'sprouts' in the second stanza was clever and excellent and I loved how you expressed your dark love for the other person, if there is no hope, you will still be with your beloved, dying, rotting.

My favourite stanza from your poem was the last one because I loved it and it really touched me especially the last two lines because it gave me the impression that your beloved is telling you there is hope but at the same time, your beloved's voice is betraying her speech and you know that the truth is in the voice which is decaying, signs of leaving. I loved the examples and the comparison with the broken guitar and battalion, loved it! *Heart*

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

Write On!
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