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 The Quake  [E]
A story setting that I am not going to do anything with. Expand/build upon if you want.
by Ghost
Review of The Quake  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Ghost

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This is a great piece of writing. I'm not sure why you wrote, in the brief description, that you're not going anywhere with this.

You definitely have the knack for writing. I read lots of action verbs that created excitement, and the sentence structure was varied, creating deeper immersion into the story. I think the ending could be stronger, though. After all the build-up, it felt like there would be something more. But ...

I do know what it's like to write a one scene setting and not see any further into the original inspiration. Just know that at any time, you have something strong to work with.

Sadly, we probably won't need a weapon to destroy humanity. We're doing an outstanding job destroying our planet by the way we live.

A brief suggestion. Maybe amp up the title to reflect the intensity of this piece and use the brief description to draw in reviewers. Be proud of your work!

If you accomplished what you wanted, then that's fine too. Writing is firstly about whatever works for you. *Wink*

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