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Hi, Matthew!

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What an entrancing poem. The overall mood was one of melancholy and loss. In my mind, it created a barren scene, but electrically alive at the same time. (If that makes sense to you.)

I caught an odd rhythm which worked well for this piece. The line breaks were a bit confusing because each one began with a capital letter, even though it was a thought being carried through. Perhaps this was a stylistic choice?

Every once in a while, I come across a book that once read, I flip back and begin all over again. That's what happened when I read this poem. I had this initial reaction of "oh, wow!" and then I returned to the first line and absorbed the finer details.

I know when a work seems effortless, it really means the author worked hard to compose it. Was part of the message that when we have one thing we long for the other? And vice versa?

You paired some unlikely images, kisses tossed like footballs, and this was where I found the greatest satisfaction.

One suggestion. I think you'll like hanging around WdC, so why not fill out your bio and introduce yourself to the community?

First thoughts last here, I guess. You chose a curious, unique title that captured my attention right away. It wasn't difficult to discern the intention of this poem. Still it's good to have a clear and concise brief description.

You have a way with words that reaches out to the reader and pulls them in. I hope to see more of your work! *Checkg*


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