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 Pretty for a Dwarf  [E]
A sad/Hilarious exchange I can nether confirm nor deny I might have have with a girl.
by T. L. Lancaster
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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The most unusual title drew me in, and the brief description made me curious and drew a smile. All winners, in my book.

It took me a few minutes to settle into your writing style, and how this story was presented, and then I just let myself relax and had plenty of laughs with this clever story.

This one sentence kicked off the rest of the story: 'It was at this point ...'

Is there a more clear way to express this? Because it's the launching board for understanding the character was of two minds. I don't think I've read a story where the mind itself is personified. One aspect of the brain berating the other. Very original.

And just when the story seemed likely to topple into overly silly, you whammed the reader with the last line, flashing your writing skills with a short, dryly humorous sentence. Well done!


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