"SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

Hello there, Tammy
This is a Simply Positive Review!


Oh, the lament of a lover, awaiting the time to meet again with the person who holds her heart.

However, reality does throw a cold splash of water in the face of one who would be so bold as to try and keep both his wife and mistress happy. Never a good situation. Also, the distance between the lovers sounds pretty far, according to the poem. Thus, she can only hope he keeps a special place in his heart just for her. The reader wonders, does he really think of her at all when she is not around?

Observations:

"I know of it and will always do," This sounds awkward.

TRY: I know of it and always will.

"Though you are [a] thousand miles afar," If you don't want the extra syllable, try: Though you're a thousand miles afar.

The poem paints a picture of the woes of being the "other" lover.

Nice job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch


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