I stumbled upon this through the "Read and Review" tool and the unusual format made me stick around.

I have to say that in the beginning I found it challenging to read, what with the wave-like structure of the lines. I found myself pausing after each word.

But when I reached your explanation it all made sense to me. This is very clever. I applaud your creativity!

You managed to construct a very well written poem for the prompt, all while taking your readers on an actual journey and putting them in touch with both your experience and that of the girl on the boat.

I soon went back and reread the poem. And once again I have to commend you on the expressive metaphors and the strong emotions that you invoke.

These are my favorites lines: "Oh how I've longed for this/ Escape from my own oceanic abyss" Such a powerful description and I could feel the disorientation and the desperation that the narrator experiences. This horrible feeling of "will this ever end?" was clearly communicated.

I also quite enjoyed the rhyme and the smooth flow of this poem.

Very clever is all I can say.

I am so glad I stumbled upon this.

Many thanks for a great read.

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