"SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

Hello there, Quick-Quill
This is a Simply Positive Review!

I found your item highlighted in the Drama Newsletter, edited by Joy.

This was quite an interesting piece. I like how you hold on to the reader -- slow and steady throughout the story.

The protagonist stands out as a lonely, not very handsome man, with a couple women always messing with his mind. Talk about psychological abuse, his mother and her friend take the cake.

He has money, which is obvious because hes has a maid/cook.

Observations:

"You have plenty of money. It isn't like its going to be a big deal." Her eyes dared him to contradict him.

[her] I believe the woman was stating to him that he had enough money not to have to worry about ceiling repairs. Thus, she made a look that dared "him" to contradict her.

There are a couple places where the reader has to reread the dialogue to identify the speaker, either because it was all in the same paragraph, or interjected somewhere, thus, the reader needs to know if it'd the mother, friend or maid.

It was not too distracting, once solved, though. Perhaps the reader's own misinterpretation at he time.

Your story had the kind of surprise ending Joy was speaking of, in her recent newsletter. I found the ending a cross between humorous and sad. Great way to tug at the emotions.

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch




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