"SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

Hello there,Tiny Dancer
This is a Simply Positive Review!

I found your item highlighted in the Drama Newsletter, edited by Joy.

This was indeed a full story packed into a tiny package. Writing a story within the 100 words limit, is no easy task. This is made especially difficult when there is a specific prompt included.

Writing about a lost love can mean different things to people, but mostly it is the loss of their soul mate, or spouse, through death or divorce.

Your story was prompted to have a twist at the end, and that it indeed had! Good way to fool the reader and tell a big story at the same time. Love the bittersweet ending.

When it comes to very tight word count stories, as this one, I review and rate according to the way the short package felt complete, as I formed the images in my mind's eye. I could see it all play out as a flash back once I read through the story. At that point, it all fit together. I think there were a few unnecessary words in the body that could have left room for other details. However, when one is writing a story as tight as they think is possible, it's difficult to see those words from subjective eyes, because you have a clear picture of what you see in your mind, in relation to the story.

EXAMPLE:

"Here I sit, thinking about where my life went wrong. Lonely for so long, waiting for that special someone to whisk me off my feet." (25 words)

These are your opening lines.

TRY: Where have I gone wrong? I've waited so long for that special someone to come into my lonely life.
(19 words)

This is a more active voice and commands the reader's attention with the first question. They wonder where she has gone wrong and why, and what caused it.

This is just an example of writing even tighter, and saving words for more impact later on in the story.

However, considering the word count restraints, you've done a wonderful job and did surprise the reader with your ending.

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch





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