*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4149264
Review #4149264
Viewing a review of: {citem:}
Review of  
Review by Charlie ~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: | (4.0)
Access:  Public | Hide Review (?)
Hello, vodkagirl1984. My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to WDC today with a quick review. Feel free to email me if you have any site questions or need a hand finding your way around. *Thumbsup*

General thoughts. What's up, vodkagirl? Hey, vodka is my drink of choice too! *Wink* Well, I've just read your little vignette and thought I'd give you a little bit of feedback. I write a lot of things like this myself. Somewhere between prose and vignettes with maybe a little bit of short story in there too. They're mostly rambling too. *Laugh*

That's cool. My favorite part of this was you imagining that his car would be baby blue. I don't know why. There's just something in my mind with a baby blue sedan. I think it actually might be a song. Oh, okay. It is a song by Modest Mouse. Maybe that's why I liked that part the most. *Music2* I don't think so though. I just like the randomness of it and the emotion that is connected to that line. I don't even think it needs the explanation after about him telling you it was blue. I just like the idea of imagining someone with a baby blue car. I feel like it could have a deeper meaning or something.

Consider this. I know that this is a rambling piece and I totally get this. Like I said, I ramble a lot too. However, I will say that it would make this a lot easier to read if it had proper punctuation, paragraphing, etc... I don't have any issue with ramblings, but it's just something to think about as you move forward.

The end. I thought this was a cool little glimpse into your memories. I think this could be really good with an edit. Thanks again for sharing with us.


** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
   *NoteR* You have not yet responded to this review. Ignore
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/my_feedback/action/view/id/4149264