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 Not There.  [E]
While sitting bare upon the chair my body is but I'm not there
by J.L.Hamilton
Review of Not There.  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, J.L.Hamilton . My name is Charlie and I'm happy to welcome you to WDC today with a quick review. Feel free to email me if you have any site questions or need a hand finding your way around. *Thumbsup*

General thoughts. Oh, what a treat. I read the description and knew I had to click on this poem and read the whole thing. It did not disappoint. Usually formed and rhyming poetry is not my style, but I'm definitely a fan of this poem.

That's cool. That first stanza is just great. The follow is on point and you're very clever with your choice of words there. I also liked the last stanza. It was dark and emotional in all the right ways. It didn't seem melodramatic, but it definitely made the reader feel the emotions of the narrator. Great imagery there.

Improve this. I was really hoping for another stanza that had the AABA rhyming pattern that you used in the first stanza. I know that's a hard one to do, but it just worked so well there. The second stanza felt a little bit underwhelming after reading that one.

The end.I thought this was an awesome poem, overall. With a little tweaking, this could be an A+ piece! Thanks for sharing.


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