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 Under my skin  [E]
A lover that find's a way back into your life in any form he or she can.
by Jenny
Review of Under my skin  
Review by ~Minja~
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jenny *Smile*

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It's been pleasure to review your "Under my skin"  on behalf of Simply Positive Group. Please be reminded that my review is based on one person's opinion and you have all rights to choose if you like it or not. So please feel free to use if you find something interesting or just ignore if you don't like something.

*Star*Rhyme?
This is beautiful free verse poem with very nice first stanza. I liked the way you compared his words with ink that is imprinting into your skin. We know that ink may be removed but we would have scars after it. The same is with words that we're saying daily, those that hurting us will stay in us, eventually they will fade away but they wont be totally forgotten. Even though there's no rhyme within a poem I still like that you attempted some in the last stanza.

*Star*Flow?
The flow of your poem picturing to reader one love story and how it mostly finish, if the relationship is not successful one always gets hurt and you said it here. Even though we don't really know if it's gonna be in this order, or if we don't have this kind of experience, we can still connect with everything you said here.

*Star*My favorite part?
This is my favorite stanza within your poem.

*Flagp*And, as if trying not to love you wasn't already hard enough,
you want to,
not only stain every surface of my body and mind
but stain every organ as well.
Tainting me further, until I'm ruined for anyone else.

*Star*Mood?
I think the best poetry comes from the people who are deeply in love. They see the world the way no one else does, maybe that is the reason why they say love is blind. It is blind because even though we sometimes know there's no future in some relationships we're still holding onto thin straw of hope for better future because no one ever can steal that hope from us. If we have hope we can conquer the world. In your poem, even you think he will ruin you, you are still ready to surrender yourself to him in hope that maybe you will have some brighter future.

*Star*Overall impression?
I liked it from the beginning till the end. I'm not too much picky person over grammar or metaphors, I like when poem has meaning and when I can find myself into it. You did well. Thanks again for sharing your work with us. All smiles.. *Smile*
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