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Review of The Bride's Pride  
Review by ~Minja~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Marci Missing Everyone *Smile*
It's been pleasure to review your "Invalid Item"  on behalf of Simply Positive Group. Please be reminded that I'm still newbie and that my review is based on one person's opinion and you have all rights to choose if you like it or not. So please feel free to use if you find something interesting or just ignore if you don't like something.

*Star*Plot?
I liked this story much better than the previous one. It's not that previous one was bad, maybe I always think that we never say enough in our writing, we always can do more. You kept the reminder of what happened on that night which I think is well written. You described everything and more than in previous story. I liked the story that came after the night she saw Sebastian with made but anyway, that is probably the point of re-write contest.

*Star*Characters?
As it's set up in modern days I admire Elle for having courage to continue her life normal after Sebastian disappointed her. I think he is little bit funny with his behavior and guys nowadays would totally do the same stuff he did. And the girl he brought with him giving a feeling to reader that he is a snob. Settings and characters are totally matching to modern world.

*Star*Writing style?
I know I bothered a lot with Jane Austen writing style, and I know it was hard to write like that, all of you tried, but what we like is to be on the safe ground. This story is like that, you wrote it from your perspective, you used words appropriate for modern age and we could relate to the point of it. It's so American style of writing.

*Star*Overall impression?
There's nothing I would add or take out from here. You clearly have the beginning, middle part and the end of the story. You could write in a few sentences what happened with Elle and Sebastian, instead of it you chose to take out part of the previous story and copy/paste it. I like it for sure like this. Good luck with the contest and keep writing. All smiles..*Smile*
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