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I had the pleasure of finding your story by clicking on the Read and Review option. Although this is classified as fantasy, I saw it more as a comment on life. Orin, because of his skills and his lofty position was revered.

When he lost those things roles will play that identify us, he lost not only his magic, but his sense of self. Humans are similarly marked by their careers of possessions. Losing a job can cause an identity crisis.

I can see where this story might be headed. I realize it is fantasy, but maybe there's a human element in here as well.

There were a few mistakes that I think you'll pick up on when you read this again. This was the most distracting.
but ne stands out amongst the rest,

The mention of elves caught me off guard. I wonder who the other characters are? Elves, also? One other thought. A reader likes to form a visual in their mind while reading. What did the ravaged land look like?

Have fun on your writing adventure!

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