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 The Three Strings  [13+]
A long piece of string walks into a bar
by Ðungeon Щarden
Review of The Three Strings  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Warden!


I came across your Bar Joke by searching through "Read and Review." Years ago, I had a friend who pantomimed this 'joke', but I've never seen it written out. *Laugh*

Not only is the joke outstanding, you did a tremendous job formatting the stanzas and creating the rhymes. This poem was more elaborate than the physical version, and not only did it bring back a honeycomb of memories, you made me laugh on a day when the gloom and doom part of me is dominant.

Your work also fits in with WDC's birthday celebration. Well, an 18+ poem. Although the strings were the main characters, I created a vision of the bar and the bartender, who spots the knot in a crowd.

*Star* I like the alliteration in "string's skinny self".

I thought perhaps the three strings would twine together to form the knot, but the idea of the two strings failing before the successful one works just as well.

I just glanced at the creation and edited date of this work. I joined in 2011 and missed the adventure of the Bar Joke Contest. My plan was to check it out to see which one won first place because yours sounded like the winner to me!

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