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by A Guest Visitor
Review of The nudist beach  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Oh God, I applaud this kind of bravery, I really do!

I came here because the title sparked my interest, and I was not disappointed.

I love how you built up the tension in the beginning, I felt for the narrator and kept thinking: "will she really go for it?" And then she did.

And then you introduced a transition, from the surface level into the deeper meaning. At one point this stopped being about nudity and started being about a person letting go of her inhibitions and finally allowing herself to be free. I especially enjoyed the part where she finally realized that no one was looking and that the self consciousness had no reason to exist.

The transition, for me, started with the words: "It seems more like therapy." This was a great line. And it got me thinking about the many instances when an unexpected experience would bring us personal growth and psychological healing.

The end was also really well done. I just had to smile at the sense of freedom that you so masterfully communicated.

And I completely agree, nudity is a wonderful equalizer. No one can boast about their money or status when they're naked. It's like the slate has been wiped clean.

And finally, I really liked this line: "Naked and proud."

More power to you!

There were a couple of lines though that might benefit from some editing. It's nothing major, just a couple of tiny typoes:

An extra "I" in: "Ii feel quite sick inside"

And

"Town" instead of "Towel" in: "Lay my town down facing the sun"

Other than that, this was beautifully written and quite inspirational.

Very nicely done!

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