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Given: Sep 2, 2015 at 4:33pm
Length: 813 Characters |
811 w/o WritingML
Your first line, onions peels. Do you need an apostrophe? Are you thinking an onion's peels, layers? Since you mentioned it a couple of times, it felt like it. As a reader it pulled me out of the poem before it could be made clear. Just a suggestion, it seems the 's' on onions should be taken off.
I didn't understand the bones still light. It made me think of osteoporosis. Two 'lights' in the same sentence was iffy.
I didn't understand most of the poem, that is the nature of poetry. The writer pours their heart and soul into it and the reader tries to understand.
I felt the deep emotion in it, despair. I really wish I did understand it better. The part about Mary Poppins especially intrigued me.
If you have the time, could you explain it to me?
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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