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 Pruning  [E]
a modern sonnet written for my poetry class. man am i proud of this one...
by maddy
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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You might want to put some dividing lines between some of this for easier reading. At the very least put a line between the cat and the woman for clearer transition.

You very well in describing the emotions and cycle of the cat.

Then you get to the woman and the part, 'kicks her ripe bely and falls out' I had five children and none of them 'fell out'. lol I had to push like crazy, hard work.

Your last part felt so sad. But if that is what is best for you, then I understand.
Thanks for sharing.

Love, LinnAnn

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