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 An Extraordinary Day  [13+]
A senior's harrowing experience.
by Happy April 2024!
Review by ~Lifelessons~
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings Happy April 2024! My name is ~Lifelessons~ and I came across this story "An Extraordinary Day" in the read and review list. Once I read the short telling of the story I had to peak and read on. I love seniors. For some reason I just click with them, always have.

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Shocking to know that this was on the news. I know your version is fiction, but in all honesty I have to wonder how that poor woman survived. I guess she was dehydrated! Too bad she could have her last say with these two teenagers. I love "Gettin old is not for sissies." It sure isn't! She is one tough cookie.


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A great exposition with the story! You jumped right into a conflict! Awesome, I love that! The conflict heightens into rising action when Nellie is put into the trunk during a heat wave. Being elderly she on a hope and a prayer of surviving this horrible ordeal. Falling action brings us to the side of the road where Nellie is let out of the trunk to her own devises. A happy resolution when she is okay and back with her family.

This story was easy to read. Great spacing and the dialogue was smooth. I enjoyed the use of the words that you were given in the prompt. "cerulean summer sky" perfect choice!

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It was clear to me from the beginning that this woman was going to be in trouble. A great story that you wrote around a news story. So many terrible things happen these days. I am so happy that this woman came out of this okay. Thanks so much for sharing!

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~LL~
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