Greetings Ashen Sunflower my name is ~Lifelessons~ and I came across this piece "Eden" in the poetry listings.
I love poetry and all the wonderful ways it can touch us as readers. It inspires us to play with words to convey such emotion.



I loved this! You followed the conventions and form of a villanelle very well. You also used great poetic conventions of many others as well. A lovely setting in August as the air turns to a chill while fall creeps in. I love how the two seasons mingle into an evening that allows us to still enjoy the sounds but smells of the next to arrive. Nature is that magical.



Alliteration

The repetition of consonant sounds starting in the beginning and throughout the line and verse. You did this is a wonderful way choosing soft sounds that ease the flow of a summer's breeze.



The repetition of vowel sounds in a sentence which you proved to have used so well.
A moth bathes in a street lamp’s glare,




The use of words to initiate the sounds the poet describes. As you used it with the owls that croon.

So many conventions that I saw and it really did make this poem so lovely. There was great imagery with your chosen words. I sit on my porch every night and soak in the changes of the seasons. You brought this to life for me.
Wonderul!



An owl unfurls his wings with regal flair.
Two more upon the rooftop gutters croon.
Summer’s symphony fills the air.

This verse just speaks poetic devices that bring to where the poet speaks of. I love the word choices here. Unfurls, regal flair.. just divine.



Thank you for sharing this beauty! I am so glad I came across it. I have nothing else to offer but only enjoyed it very much. I hope you enjoy the week's festivities during the anniversary of the site!!



~LL~