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by A Guest Visitor
Review of A Sisters Heart  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Seshat *Smile*

*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


*BalloonR* HAPPY 15th WDC ANNIVERSAY! *BalloonR*
and I'm here to give you review as my *Giftr* to you this awesome WDC Anniversary!.

By the way CONGRATULATIONS for being one of the Newbies Showcased this September., that's where I found your portfolio. *Smile*

I'm not expert in reviewing, please forgive me if I do some mess.

The TITLE-
While I'm spreading my little wings into your beautiful poet-folio, this piece of yours did catch my attention to read and give a review.
The given title makes a curious effect in me on what's behind that sisters heart, and the short description specially the word lost.

The BODY-
This is a momento or memory about someone we love and
the emotion on the poem keeps on flowing until the last stanza.

The rhythm is good but some rhymes on lines distract the flow while reading it,
like in the third stanza on the third line.
and in the last stanza and last part.

"To be called back to him"
him should be capitalize-Him because we are referring to God.

Over all this piece is good, and you did well in delivering the means and moods of the poem.

Until next reviewing, just keep on smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.*Smile*

Regards

Samberine Sig.
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