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RAINING IN THE GARDEN  [E]
A short poem of nature.
by Mary Ann MCPhedran
In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Mary Ann MCPhedran *Smile*

*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*


*BalloonR* HAPPY 15th WDC ANNIVERSAY! *BalloonR*
I'm Samberine Everose your little fairy friend here in WDC. *FairyL*
and I'm here to give you a review as my *Giftr* to you on this awesome WDC Anniversary!.*ButterflyR*

By the way CONGRATULATIONS! for being one of the Newbies Showcased this September., that's where I found your portfolio. *Smile*

I'm not expert in reviewing, please forgive me if I do some mess.

The TITLE-
While I'm spreading my little wings into your beautiful home-folio, this piece of yours did catch my attention to read and give a review because-
*CheckR* its a poetry- I love poetry.
*CheckR* its about nature- I'm a nature lover.
*CheckR* and have a captivating title in which the given imagery is refreshing. I imagined a garden drenched by the rain.
Good job in attracting a reader. *Thumbsup*

The BODY-
I can say its beautiful, the given emotion is good. Lively and you did well in describing a garden where rain is falling.
I've been like a fairy playing with the rain in the garden with those daisy flowers closing their buds upon reading your piece. *Smile*

"But after rain there's a rainbow's in sight"

Do we need to add s their in the rainbow word, it just distract the rhythm while reading it
and Sometimes the need of punctuation can make and entice a poem to be more lively and moving.

Over all, this piece is good, I liked it. Very Clever.*Thumbsup*

Until next reviewing again, just keep smiling while stay in writing and reviewing.*Smile*

Regards,

Samberine Sig.
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