Greetings ENB my name is ~Lifelessons~ and I am here to review this poem "Moonlight Love" which I found in the Angel Army review list.



A beautifully written piece of two lovers under the moon. May the kiss under a thousand stars 'n dream under the largest moon. May the sands of memories stay as crystals in their hearts to remain over time. Oh-the passionate flutter in the winds of a midnight love.

This piece is beautiful and the imagery is lovely. I see so many conventions that brought me to a soft moment. Easy pleasures of sounds from words you have chosen.





The repetition of consonant sounds, especially at the beginning of the line and throughout. Nicely done!
those ominous things their hearts do not bear,



This convention was a little harder for me and still trying. Although using the proper punctuation it is easier to do.
A run-on line of poetry in which logical grammatical sense carries over into the next line.

They soar above the clouds of life;
those ominous things their hearts do not bear,
love lifts them off their feet:
straight into the air...
Hand in hand they glide -
a sweet dance,
a glorious trance,
a symphony of silent thoughts;
passion reigns supreme.

Metaphor

A comparison between two unlike things
as you used it in this line:
Soft like whispers the stars illume


A beautiful free verse that gave a lovely imagery. Soft sounds making it more pleasant to the ear.

Favorite Lines

a symphony of silent thoughts;

A perfect example of a Hyperbole with soft sounds making me wonder what thoughts would be like if they were silent. Inner peace I would imagine.

Suggestions

The only suggestion i have would be to change

souls that o're the night fly away...

It was the only word that caught me off guard with the meter and flow. somehow I don't see it fitting.

I loved this piece and it was wonderful to read. I loved the conventions you used to make it that more enjoyable. Great use of punctuation that spoke to me instead of reading it. Thank you for sharing!

I hope you are enjoying the week of festivities on the site!!

~LL~





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