OVERALL SENSE: I love the way you stepped in to help this struggling mother and autistic son. Doing so, you've found true love in the process, what couldn't be better! Working with a child like this can be hard at times, but you seem to be making progress. When an autistic child hugs you like that, you know he was very happy. I was simply awed by your story and your patience with this child, and you're calling him your son makes it all the better, because he knows you'll always be there for him.

         TITLE APPEAL: "Me and my Wife don't use "Step dad"" is the title of this piece. This is written so sincerely by you that I had to spoil it and do any corrections, but I shall do a few to show your errors. I like this title and I would feel the same way if I had been there when the child was at a younger age.

         STYLE/VOICE: The style is Activity, Action/Adventure, and War.

The voice of the author stays strong as he explains how he deals with his new life with an autistic son and a mother who had a severely injured leg. When the father of his autistic son walked away leaving them alone to fend for themselves is just mind-boggling.

         TONE/MOOD: The tone is sad in places, but with you in the picture, I can see a better life ahead for your wife and your child. So there's an affectionate, hopeful, and admiring tone to this piece.

The mood is harmonious, warm, and playful as you continue working with your autistic son, improving his skills and nurturing him into a better human being.

         SCENE/SETTING: The scene and setting takes place at your home where you are relating your story to your readers. I have to say, I admire you for what you are doing with your life, your wife and your child. May you all have a happy life together.

Development/Pace: I think you showed us your way of life perfectly, your feelings, and your hope in improving your son's skills. I can see that your are going to accomplish this if you go on with what you have been doing.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/SENTENCE STRUCTURE: This work needs a lot of editing. I'll show you some of your errors.

My Wife and I, We have been desperatly trying to find effective ways to raise our son. He is Austic and suffers speech delay Mostly he is reasonable at mimicing. - Most of your errors are in spelling. Use spell check to catch those. Desperately with the 'e'. Autistic is spelled wrong, and mimicking is spelled as it sounds.

We felt getting to know one another was more important then rushing into love. It has worked for us better then ever expected. - Use than when indicating comparison in a sentence. We felt getting to know one another was more important than rushing into love. It has worked better for us than we've ever expected.

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: My suggestion, use spell check whenever you write anything. It will make reviewing your pieces easier for your readers. Some might even pass over your material and you wouldn't want that.

         LINES I LIKED: He hugged me tight. This is the first time me and him have ever really played, As i tend to promote more tough love then anything else.. I could tell he was grateful though.. so i am going to continue this approach, making him secretly teach himself how to be a decent human being by imagination and structured play time.

         WHY I LIKED THIS QUOTE: It shows your hard work is paying off. Yes, I can see how imagination and structured play is perfect for these autistic children. May you always get these hugs, and I wish you all the luck in the world and that your family stays happy and full of love.

Always use the capital 'I' form when writing.

JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION: Thank you for sharing this item! This piece may help others who have autistic children.



Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading,

Jeannie



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .