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 My Conversation With God  [E]
This was the most emotional thing I've ever written.
by Johnathan Tillman
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Flower4* Hi Johnathan! Thank you for sharing this outstanding poem! *Smile* *Flower4*


*Reading*MY INITIAL THOUGHTS*Reading*

This my friend, this just gave me chills. Bravo! *Delight*

● Character(s):

Your characters, you and God. You bring such insight to this conversation, and I can tell that you know Him.

● Storyline/Plot:

I love the storyline to this poem. It is something that we all have been through - having a "beef" with God. I believe He expects nothing less. We are weak, by definition as humans, both physically and spiritually. It is through Him that we find our strength.

He knows our needs, even before we do, and many of our wants, we strongly believe to be needs. These prayers are not answered, and often times even our deepest prayers go unanswered, because this is not the path in which He chose for us.

For example, my granddaughter was taken from her parents and placed in foster care. Now this devastated me, both mentally and emotionally. I prayed without ceasing, putting complete and TOTAL faith in God to fix this. He has always answered ALL of my prayers, and when she wasn't returned, I cried out to God, asking him why. I got my answer. I felt a hand on my shoulder and heard a voice inside my head say, "Would you really want her to come back to her old life?" And my answer was NO!

Her life now is amazing, and she is still a part of my own life. She has been adopted by my foster-niece, who was taken in by my sister when she was a child. Full circle. God's plan. I lost nothing, but my baby girl - she gained SO MUCH! And all because God said "No." *Heart*

● Dialogue:

The dialogue in this piece is amazing. I believe that this would be a true conversation with God, and His words would be exactly these that you have written. Excellent job! *Stary*





*Heart* MY FAVORITE PART(S):*Heart*

"“Oh yeah about that beautiful black woman? What do you think I put her in your life for?
She’s my tool for your soul and the key to let me get past that lock around your heart.
And as far as me abandoning you, I’ve never left you from the start

Don’t let anyone, ever try to take your self-worth
Because I made you, and I don’t make junk, you’ll be a treasure that I’ll use to change this earth.

And then, it was if my tears’ motive became different
My mind suddenly eliminated the clouds, and like a polished jewel, my tears washed my soul clearer.
Before God departed for the night, I asked, “So how will I know you’re with me? I can’t see you.”
He said, “Son, you were made in my image. Just look in this mirror.”" This is what I believe a true conversation with God would be like! *Heart*




*Idea* SUGGESTIONS: *Idea*

None that I could find. Perfect spelling, punctuation and grammar. Great job! *Badge*



*Vine1*IN CLOSING: *Vine2*

Thanks again for sharing this wonderful poem. I know your readers will love it as much as I do. *Smile*

I think you're a very good writer, and I hope to read more from you soon. Keep up the good work, & Keep Writing! *Pencil*


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