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 |  | The Herald  [E] The tempest screams a warning in the night.  |
| (4.5)| Hello Angels in my Ear . I found your poem listed on "Invalid Item" . So, here I am.  Overall Impression When I read this poem, I know that it is about storms. I will be the first to admit that thunderstorms frighten me. This resulted from a lightning bolt racing through my window screen, across the living room, and out the other window screen. Yes, as weird as this sounds, it kept going. I was a youngster when this happened. It scared the heck out of me. As I read this poem, I could feel the tension, fear, and eeriness of it all. I was right there with you! I enjoyed this poem. Stanza 1 This stanza is written well. The solo sentence that follows, "A warning of its anger," is also well written. Stanza 2 L2: and...howl S1: "the" is not needed here. Removing it will not change the meaning. L3: at the windows S1: A comma would go well here. Why, you may ask? It will keep the flow of the reading smooth. L7: at the glass S1: Place a comma after "glass." It will keep the flow of the reading smooth. Stanza 3 This stanza is well written. Great job! Stanza 4 L4: It's...breath, S1: Change "It's" to "It is." This is out of place. You do not use contractions anywhere else in this poem.  Tip: Keep punctuation consistent.Stanza 5 L1: The...up S1: A comma would work well after "up." It reads easier. L4: and...silence. S1: Remove "then." It is unnecessary here. Rating   Other Tip: Keep punctuation consistent.WRITE ON! ** Image ID #1950616 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/10/2015 @ 1:01pm EDT