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 Death  [E]
Life is short so one should live it responsibly.
by HRK
Review of Death  
Review by Nixie
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi HRK. Nixie, here.


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First Impression
*Fleurdelis* The title was a little trite and didn't grab my attention. I rarely review poetry because I'm a short story writer.

So why did I read it? This week I've been pondering over what your brief description encouraged.

A few thoughts
*Fleurdelis* What is the first stanza suggesting? Death has never before been contemplated? The pronoun (their) suggests someone observing. Who are they?

My interpretation of stanza one. It takes great strength to stand by and do nothing when a person is dying.

Whenever death comes wandering in, expected or not, I ask myself the same question. How can a person simply not be anymore? Is that what you were expressing in the last sentence?

Slight correction
[off - of]

Emotional Connection
*Fleurdelis* My dad died in his sleep a few hours after I visited him in the hospital. Somehow, through his oxygen mask, he managed to say "I'm done." On an intellectual level, his words sounded logical. He was in his late eighties and ill. Death was the natural conclusion.

But to actually see him not breathing on the same bed as when I saw him before? Even though I knew he was dying, the pain was no less. I agree, the act of dying is easy. But in a case of lingering, death brings anguish with no indication of when it will take over.

Lasting Impression
*Fleurdelis* The topic of death is complex and perplexing. We often speak of it. The concept consumes us. Is it the human ego that cannot believe we will not always continue? Your work touched lightly on this natural occurrence. What's presented here made me curious. Have you encountered death before?

Keep writing. *Wink*



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