Hi! I'm Fivesixer , and it's my pleasure to review your work today. Remember, this is only my opinion, so take whatever you'd like from it...after all, you're the author! The item I'm reviewing is "Dear 13 Yr Old Me" .

First Impression: Welcome to WDC. Literarycat ! I'm glad you found us and I hope throughout your WDC experience you can say the same. I hope you don't mind me sharing a few words with you about your piece, which is a beautiful look back and a welcome bit of advice we can all take some pointers from.

What I Really Liked: I think many of us could've stood to see a letter like this in our mailbox from our older selves while we were growing up! Ahhh, if we only knew then what we know now...life would've been much easier, and maybe more rewarding> But we're who we are because of the struggles we go through, and it's also important to know that. You don't sugarcoat it. That in itself fits the "Inspirational" genre you listed, and I can appreciate that.

Spelling And Grammar: No spelling errors that I came across, but I'll admit I wasn't totally paying attention because I was sort of lost in the overall message...so no glaring mistakes, which leaves a cleaner angle to concentrating on your main points.

Suggestions: Just a few petty things that probably side more on my preferences...I would probably word the sentence There is a saying "gold refined in the fire," that you will be you. a little differently...maybe with different punctuation. Like There is a saying: "gold refined in the fire"; that you will be you. A few sentences later, I would suggest Some can be mended and other learned from. look more like Some can be mended; others should be learned from. And later in the same paragraph, I would make "adventure" plural (and stick an "and" before that part in the sentence, although it isn't necessary if it's stream-of-conscious thinking)...more adventures = more experiences, both good and bad, and we become more well-rounded from it all. And no one wants just one adventure! Life's a series of adventures, whether thrilling or otherwise . But these are just my opinions, and you're free to take them however you see fit, or not at all.

Final Thoughts: It's awesome that you took the time to do this, and I'm glad you shared it with us. Sometimes we need that look back, if only to tell us we'll eventually turn out ok. If I knew at 35 what I know at 40, maybe I'd be different...and if I knew at 13 what I learned at 33, would I have gone through the same experiences? Who knows? But it's good to be able to look back and reassure ourselves that things happen for a reason...whatever that reason is.

Thanks for giving me the opportunity to check out your work at WDC! I hope you found this review helpful and encouraging!

Write on!
-Norb



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .