Hey there, Power Unit . Your WDC anniversary was yesterday and I thought I'd leave a quick review to celebrate you! I hope this review finds you well and you're enjoying the start of your 7th year here on wDC!

I don't know if you're still looking for some ideas on these snippets that you've jotted down. They are almost 4 years old at this point, but I just saw them so, they're new to me! Anyway, I do this same thing with jotting down little bits of potential poems. Sometimes they turn into something, sometimes they just stay right where they are, tucked away in a notebook or document somewhere.

On the first snippet, I think there's some super good imagery there. As far as if it's enough, I do think it's reading like just the snippet of a longer piece. I love the idea of connecting this kind of resentful acceptance with the word around you. My favorite line in it is "Warm winds scatter my thoughts." I think you could expand on this a bit and introduce other nature elements into the theme of the poem. Think of things like lakes, clouds, animals, etc... and how you can connect them to your general message.

On the second one, I definitely don't think it needs another stanza. I kind of like the power of the last line "The end of the line" and I don't see any way you can add to it without kind of killing the power of that line. Are you worried it sounds like a Beatles song? I don't see it. I don't think the last stanza is too contrived. It didn't feel forced to me, especially the last two lines. I'm not sure abut the first two lines of it, but it definitely works at the very least.

Anyway, just a fellow poet's rambling ideas here. Have an awesome day!



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