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Review #4 of 6 for week ending 2/3

Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group!


TITLE: Knowing of your other works I surmised what this piece was going to be about. Again I applaud your frankness and your strength in bringing these true tales to life.

THEME: The theme is the stripping of a child's innocence and trust.

TONE: The tone is sad but forthcoming. Letting parents especially know the truth behind a child's tears and fears.

PACE: The pace is quick as we move from the comfort of the bed to the fear in knowing what the uncle will do.

FLOW: Your flow is even and the reader moves with trepidation from the quiet stillness of the grandparent's home to the fear of the uncle approaching.

FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE: You use straightforward language to explain the fears of the child and how the innocence is lost.

SPELLING/GRAMMAR: I noted no errors in any of these areas.


AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: There is no reason to change any of this poem. Another beautiful job!

EXCELLENT WRITING EXAMPLES: These lines are my favorite because of the transition from the loving nature of the farm to the terror that one man would bring...

Precious little girls must never know fear
When snugly wrapped in the goose-down bed.
She listened to sounds of the dark night,
Attentive ears heard the voices of the farm,
Hooting of the midnight's owl,
Neighing of Papa's friendly horse,
Wind blowing branches against the house.
Then the scariest sound she'd heard before

You are a wonderful poet and author and you are also an excellent advocate for those who are challenged by terror in today's world.

Thank you for the opportunity to review your excellent work!



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