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 Review #4193630 |
 | Joy and Laughter  [E] The effects of joy and laughter  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"    Hiya T.L.Finch! I am here with a review to celebrate you!   What a positive theme for a poem to inspire us all to find the joy! Your point of view is valid as we know that laughter is known to raise our vibes and even help healing. We can use these shifts often as you say to "brighten" and "Lighten"!   The poem was a delight to read with its wonderful rhyme and clear images. I like words like "guffaw" and "cackle" and the ideas of "cold heart" and "thickest ice". The structure of the verses appeared balanced with consistent rhyme except for one: in verse 2 "forms" and "heart" do not rhyme. In other verses you had abab. I wonder about maybe changing to "it helps the coldest heart to warm"..."warm is closer to rhyming with "forms".  In the first verse I wanted to drop one of the "and"s: maybe "to lighten your day". The last verse had. the weakest appeal to me and the last line with "try" had a weaker flow. the sentiments are solid! The tone and message is upbeat and wise and invites me to develop the habit to have the benefits received from a smile or laugh. It is contageous too. You could probably add that. Thanks for sharing your vision and crafting! I enjoy happy thoughts!Light on the path as you write on! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 02/09/2016 @ 7:46pm EST