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Review of Refusing to Melt  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Cinn ,

I am Lorraine and I am reviewing your piece "Invalid Item"  in affiliation with "Simply Positive Review Forum " .

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Title: Even the title of this poem has food for thought, I don't know how do it. Ultimately, a snowman isn't capable of controlling the weather, so he can't exactly refuse to melt. Good title, had me thinking before I'd even reached the poem.

First Impression: If you hadn't stated snowman in the brief description, I might have been a little terrified of the first line. *Laugh*

Rhyme: No rhyme that I can find, but it doesn't need it. This poem flows well, with pauses at certain places to give extra impact to the line before it. *Thumbsup*

Word Choice: Love the comparison to the compression of the air in the snowman to the air in lungs. It creates a link between the snowman and a human. You also didn't fall into the trap of over-using the word snow like many do when writing poems such as this. You've got a variety of words, to keep the poem interesting throughout and not boring the reader with the same words over and over again.

Spelling/Grammar: No errors spotted!

Closing Thoughts: As a side note, your "Poetry" folder brief description states, "There are over 50 poems tucked away in here by now", maybe you should adjust that to a whole lot more. *Laugh* Poems definitely aren't my specialty, but you seem to write a lot of them! I'll have to explore your much smaller short stories folder and see if I can find something. *Smile*

Lorraine

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