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Hi Autumn,

I stopped by your port today and decided to review this poem.

*Giftp*I liked the theme. It's looked like the medieval times where the master and his apprentice go looking for their people. The only thing is that the master is the tattoo on his assistant's body. This is very clear in the brief description but isn't very clear from the poem.

*Candy1*Another suggestion is to have roughly equal syllable count, especially in verse two. This will make the poem flow smoothly. In verses 2,3,4,5, I didn't see any punctuation at the end of the lines. I thought you could use commas or full stops at the end of some.

*Apple*Overall, I think this is a good poem. I like the idea of the master being in form of a tattoo. I also like that you want to polish the poem some more. That's a sign of an open-minded writer, and if you continue this way, you'll do great.

Write on!
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