Hello Lifeaholic . How are you doing? My name's Charlie and I'm here to welcome you to the site with a review of your poem, "Grandma" . Thanks for sharing your writing with us!

I thought this was a sweet poem because it's so hard for one person to move on with their life after their significant other has passed, especially if they were together for a long time. I loved the wistful tone of the second stanza where she calls out Henry's name and tells him to meet her in the forest. It could easily be a favorite spot of theirs and I like that you left it up to the reader to write the couples' story in their own head.

A couple things I noticed:

She is oak old
in her place
of time

"In her place OF time" sounds strange to me. Isn't it usually someone's place IN time?

remembering to forget

I thought this might work better as "forgetting to remember" because why would an elder woman want to forget? Even if she had lost her husband, she would still want to remember the good times with him. It would make sense though that she would be forgetful, forgetting to remember the good times.

Could be its a reason
If she had her wits
a posse

I read this part a few times and couldn't really understand it.

Other than those few issues, I thought this was quite lovely. I loved the "patch tapestry on her heart" line especially. Great imagery. Thanks again for sharing your poem with us.



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .