The better of your work I must say...

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"she's not one to speak
so she writes herself
a seclusion, dotting the 'I's'
her all important capitol 'I's'
counted in a spiral notebook
a lonely two or three of the 'I's'"
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successes

manages to grab emotion

subtlety

profoundness
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flaws

ends a bit low compared to the middle and pre end
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I would advise you try to write something not about writing, considering a lot of the past ones are about writing...