not exactly what I had in mind XD

no highlight, pretty much even in quality, till the end...
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successes

even in quality (a feat rarely accomplished...)

suspense (absolutely needed for a story like this...)

manages to mildly pulls emotions (starts with dread, then fear, then dread, then relief...)
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flaws

Dues Ex Machina

needed a much more sympathetic and interesting character for a complete emotion turn... (I wasn't even that worried about the dog, considering this is fiction and we don't know what Pita was like beforehand, besides a little talk - run on sentences!)
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overall great story, though it absolutely needed more time and emotion...