from noobie to noobie who is an author O_o

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"I have chosen silence today above all else.
I am already haunted. Who, then, will I haunt?
Tag, Iâm âIT.â Itâs my turn now.
This inhospitable place will not miss me.
Freedom is this power to choose a non-destiny.
The deadly sacredness of freedom cannot be understated.
There is nothing left to hide.
Those things are beyond all desperate control.
Finally, I will be able to tame the unruly."
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successes

subtle

intriguing

respectful
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flaws

tries to be too profound

goes all around with meanings (just didn't flow correctly :P)

has a feeling of filler in the beginning... (some lines aren't exactly needed, "The natural progression of life has led me to my death." is a example of this, just tells far too much and the poem would've been better without it XD)
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3.7 stars, rounds to 3.5 :)

now time to be the greedy SIMPLY POSITIVE Member I am and get GPs!