Long Lost Summer Sounds [E] A rhyming poem about how modern, air-conditioned houses shut out neighborhood sounds. |
Hi Harry. I was lookign for earth day themes and found this one! The title was intriguing and then I read the tag line! What a timely theme and rather sad to contemplate. I so liked how you introduced the theme---becoming aware of out side noises of summer by having the house repaired. The idea that the poet is enthralled gives me the idea that hearing this was extraordinary---so long has he been closed up. You really made a potent point! I really felt the nostalgic tone as that lead to past memories as the images and sounds of summer make you recall. We are so used to technology--esp the air conditioning! Your query is a good one. The comparison to then and now is vivid and I so like the porch scene. The poem flows coherently with balanced verses and rhyme scheme. I like the repetition of the "s"sounds and the idea of sterilized sound is brilliant! I did have to read the third verse again as I got lost in it length to make it a question. A few commas might help with coherence the first time around maybe. Thanks for sharing this reflective vision which did give me pause to think what might be missed. I dislike when the motor of neighbours air conditioners disrupt my quiet and tuning in to nature. Light on the path as you write on! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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