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 Lady Slumber  [E]
A woman whom we all seek, yet only few find.
by TheLunchRaven
Review of Lady Slumber  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Balloonp* Welcome to WDC The Lunchraven! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


Wow! I so enjoyed the vivid image of this woman in the vastness of the mind. I could so imagine her. I get the idea of her contrary qualities. I really liked "callused heart is somber and kind" and the sad idea of "presence suppressed"! Wow!

The poem flows well though I notice the rhyme scheme gets lost after line 8. I saw it seemed to be
abba abba and then changed. Usually in form poems the rule of thumb is to have some patterns consistent. I love the concepts in the poem and wonder how it could be tweaked in that one area.
*Wink* or not.

Thanks for sharing this wonderful vision and posting at WDC. Very creative! Way to go Author!! *Starstruck*

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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