Hello Passionate . How are you doing? My name's Charlie and I'm here to welcome you to the site with a quick review of your flash fiction story, "The Bus" . Thanks for sharing your story with us.

I have no idea how people write these super short stories with a full beginning, middle, and end, but I love when it works out well. This one definitely held my attention from beginning to end and I wasn't expecting the ending at all. Once I got down to the last paragraph, I was thinking, {I]Okay, where is this going? It's almost over. Do something. Isn't it fun to get into the mind of your readers?

I loved the entire first paragraph because I know that feeling way too well. That "soaked with sweat so I better not move" idea is almost instinctual in hot, humid climates. I felt like I was on the bus too, watching all of this happen as Sarah sat across from me. Your descriptions of the setting were on point.

The moral of the story being "don't judge a book by its cover" is not something I was expecting at all. I had no idea what was going to happen, but I definitely didn't think it would be that. I didn't notice any grammatical issues or typos either. Thanks for the fun, little read!



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .