Hello iguanamountain,

my name is Tiggy and I am reviewing your story as a judge for "What a Character! : Official WDC Contest" . Thanks for entering! Please bear in mind that my comments and suggestions are only my opinion. Other reviewers might see it differently.


Ha, the main character in this story really didn’t have a good day! At least, for the first part of the story. It seemed that he was reminded of everything that he had done wrong in his life, and not in a kind and gentle way, either. He naturally assumed that he was dead, and although he was assured that he was not, the feeling remained, for the readers at least. What else could have happened to him? Actually, you didn’t really say. A near-death experience, maybe? Was the mysterious guide an angel, or maybe was it all just in the main character’s mind? It didn’t seem that way since at the end, there were some real life implications for him, but the question remained. In any case, his conflict was quite compelling and it made for an interesting story.

I liked how you let the readers figure out what was going on at the same time as the character did. There was a measure of confusion at first, just like he experienced, but it became clearer as the story developed. At least the guide’s intentions seemed clear, even if I didn’t quite work out who he was. There was hope at the end that something positive would come out of the experience and that the main character would do something right, after all his failures had just been listed.

The dialogue was excellent, quite humorous in places, like when the guide repeated his opening statement, much to the main character’s chagrin, without offering any further information. Other parts were quite serious, but the conversations conveyed a lot about both characters and you did a good job using them to advance the plot.

I liked the descriptions. There were some excellent lines, like the one where the main character recognised where the voice was coming from. It showed the disorientation he felt and indicated that things would become clearer while at the same time explaining a bit about the setting.

I noticed a few minor errors but overall, the story was quite polished and I enjoyed the read.





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .