Hello, and good morning

Like the last piece that I reviewed, I found this item on the Review Request board. I found this item particularly hard to rate, since there are three stories instead of one and I am to pick among them. I'm not sure if you are going to pick one to develop or leave the item as a pick-your-own-fable. I think I will rate the fable I preferred, and give it four stars. It was a solid fable which needed few revisions. Again, here's the policies I posted again for your reference: "Bobbi's Rating and/or Reviewing Policy" .


The typos and grammar issues I caught were as follows:

as he approached her and said, “nNever trust New, uninterrupted statements in dialogue should be capitalized.

head hen replied, “nNever trust a Same here.


A few things I noticed as a reader:

If I were to pick a favorite from the three, I would pick the first fable. The story in this one stays true to the trickster fox symbolism that I learned as a kid in fables, and it teaches an interesting (and sort of dark) lesson that we still falter on well into our adulthood.

The last two have interesting lessons as well, though the fox in these two felt more like a weasel-y character to me. There are fables, I know, that show the fox in a less than clever light, like the Fox and the Grapes. I couldn't help but imagine in the last two something of the likes of the weasel that used to show up in the hen house on those Looney Tunes shows. Maybe I watch too much cartoons.

Thank you for allowing me to review your piece. I'm just another reader and writer so use or discard any of my suggestions at your personal discretion. If you make changes and would like me to reassess your piece for a higher rating, feel free to e-mail me.

Keep writing and keep improving!

--Brandi