Oh I really enjoyed these haiku with their potent images of nature in a moment in time. Good cut line represented by the fragment in the first lines though I think it would feel more haiku like if the first lines were put as the third lines.

If I may be so bold as to play with your haiku: I have been learning so I like to share.

raven chicks
cry out for food
hymns echo

I can hear the birds and the choir form the church or the bells echoing through the woods. Nice contrast that allows me to add what I might see to your observation of the moment.
I am learning that with Haiku less is more and the strict 5-7-5 is less fashionable. Even using too many adjectives is out. So In playing with your words...I already know they are hungry from the crying, so it is not needed. You could use a colour word or a number of chicks for specificity.

Thanks for listening to me ponder alternatives. LOL I really like your messages and punch line quality. and it is a choice to have the short phrase as line one and each one does provide a thoughtful comparison, which I admire. I am not so good at that yet.

The first one has a real depth to it that inspires me to ponder more. Well done.

Keep on haikuing!! I am so enjoying your examples and learn from you.

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