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Review by ~Minja~
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*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! *BalloonR*

It's been a pleasure to review your "Invalid Item"  on behalf of "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" .
My review is just my opinion.
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*Starb* Overall impression?

         I came across your writing in read a newbie public page and I thought to share my thoughts on it and welcome you          to the site. I'm a huge lover of a prose and I found your writing really enjoyable to the point that I could imagine
         the image of you at the gas station and how you're handling all kind of customers at any time of the day and night.          Even though you named this piece of writing 'Gas Station Sunrise' I wasn't really attached to this description
         within a writing, I was more interested about the part where you talked about the artists and other intellectuals
         coming there and the way you just say: "have a nice night."
         It was fun little reading *Reading*


*Starb* Suggestions?

         Well, since you named your writing 'Gas Station Sunrise' and talked so little about it, I guess you could add some
         more of that view to make the writing complete. Scene where you describe yourself was really nice and maybe
         little bit melancholic to me, but I just expected you'll add part about sun coming up, you finishing night shift and
         how it all looks like before you take your coat and ride back home.

*Starb* What I liked the most?

         I want to laugh, and wildly dance at their concerts in tattoo parlors, waxing poetically in the back rooms of book
         stores, and assume my role as the night-time oracle of intellectual superiority.

         I especially loved this part where you wrote about your desires and what would you really do instead of just saying
         'have a nice night.'. I think that most of the people can relate to these thoughts, especially when at work things
         get little bit rough and all we wanna do is to escape for a while. I enjoyed it immensely. Thank you for sharing your
         writing with us and welcome to WdC once more. All smiles..*Smile*.


~Minja~
Founder of "Invalid Item" 
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*Pencil* Be courageous and try to write in a way that scares you a little *Pencil*





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